Look Out (please reply)

You all better look out
You dont no whos comin just hit me up and give me a shout
I might be new at this but that doesnt mean i cant flow
All of you others are slow
Im about half way there and out of shine
But im like a crushed light balb all out of shine
You might be better than me and this shit
But then u better just have a sit
Im not the rapping type but i sure love to do this
Its not as easy as taking a piss
Ill learn and i will show all of you how to do this right
my raps might not be all that tight
Im going to end this on a good note
So you all can just build my ass a moat

yo ryhme no offence was wack as hell hit me back if u want sum help :banghead: :hump:

yo ill cut u some slack since your a newbie...but the rhyme was abc-ish and your vocab wasnt too good, but over time you get better and will flow better with your vocab and whatnot, keep spittin....