Originally Posted by el poeta
Hmm...
There was some goos points to this, the back bone pat was effective in my mind, I don't think this was as real said, complex, it was actually basic poetry, not too many metaphors, metaphors and deep imagery makes complexity, it's not just a bigger choice of vocabulary thing... I kind of enjoyed this, but there wasn't too much imagery in it too be honest, thats why i liked the back bone part, as it showed some imagination... But as for content, i really didn't see that much here... it was good enough for a read, but in all honesty (with no hate) i would not say this is a hall of fame piece... As i said, it's good for a read, but just theres alot of areas that need work, as your wording could could be placed so much more effectively to give the reader a full grasp of the picture your tying to inset in their minds.