happy birthday hawk daddy

i wrote this because every year on eachothers birthday me and my friend (we call him hawk) put raps on eachothers facebook wall just tell me what you think

yo check it, hawk daddy
you the flyest motherfucker from tc to caddy
you're my favorite bird of prey
and you're 15 years today
and 20 more tomorrow
you're lethal, kilimanjaro
cause you killin while you're onstage
and chillin like an ice age
still fillin and drillin adrenaline like its road rage
you spit sticks and stones and a 12 guage
quick, he's in the zone, now he's uncaged
rappin and slappin up rhymes like a vandal
he's laughin they're clappin pete, blow out the candles
make a wish, fuck it make it three
but you got it, yourself, thuggy thug and me
so you can drop your glock we're the holy trinity,
and then go fuck a clock we go from now to infinity,
uh, together sick like malaria
we're forever mass hysteria
happy birthday hawk daddy

Not bad. This isn't really one of my favorite rhymes ever, but you were rappin for one of your friends cuz it was his birthday, so for that I gotta give you dats. Practice makes perfect, so I think you'll get better as time goes on. Keep rappin. ^_^