Whattup yo
Meant to get to this one earlier, 'preciate the shoutout.
Gotta say your style ain't changed since I last read. Still ill. Your voice is somewhat generic but distinctive, if that makes sense.
Can't help but to hear that emphasis on certain syllables when I read, way more than I usually do. Keep punching dawg. Anyway
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A barren wasteland with hunter-gatherers wading through its scant remains.
Tall grasses sway in silent synchronicity as golden grains are stood
The words "with" and "as" really throwing off the flow here, feel myself stumbling while reading.
"facing up at the fateful summer gaze of the Eurasian sun/patience comes with age amongst" - dope multi. wicked dope.
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before a guttural grunt then establishes the hunt is still active!
would prolly flow better with the phrase "to establish" but the imagery throughout this part is sick. You've got a boy working on his hunting skills somewhere in earth's eastern hemisphere. cool.
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They eye the horizon with suspicion and caution a must
each step as small and flat-footed as the prey they sought to ambush.
something about this line I fucks with.
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his movements as wooden and jagged as the assegai our hunter has brandished.
The crunch of a snapping twig suddenly panics their prey —
standing up straight,
the multisyllabic overlap you're doing here is cool but kind of awkward.
"striking both fear in its heart and spears in its cartilage." - yooooooooooo
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You’re talking to me now - The Mammoth - A true titan of industry -
One of the most feared giants in history, and I am a different breed
what a twist! Introducing a first-person character, and some perspective whiplash. Forgivably corny, but i can dig it.
"bore the imprint left by my footprints on ground I’ve already been stood." - this is where it becomes more of a flex-piece than anything else.
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My feet stomp their spinal columns with cold sickening thuds
turning the slow trickling substance into their own rivers of blood.
With a lone flick of my tusks, I attack the loudest first —
and stab the cowards sternum before bringing him crashing down to earth.
prolly the sickest four bars of this whole joint
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I stamp the ground asserting my dominance over those stood in my wake
each thunderous quake disrupting the status quo as the sleeping jungle awakes.
you're british, right? jw
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The remains are dispersed among all who occupy the habitat that we live in
— the death of the Neanderthals giving new life to the entire animal kingdom…
Kind of a weird way to end it but I feel like this is one of those raps that's a big extended metaphor for attacking wack emcees.
Either way, you did not disappoint. Good shit man.