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yooo, I've had a few battles just been gettin used to dis, n realised u need to do ya research on da nigga ya battlin etc. but still cnt get why my last sets bin rated so weak... for example i battled a dude in the AAFES n used this
Ur not street ur a family guy, send another up,
Monster, please, u put a pic of ya mother up,
betta cover up, like dis was battle ground trainin,
Ass 4 money only thing dis nigga exchangin,
Won't go racist, fuck a whitey fuck a blackie,
Im british, so if u wanna hit aim for an iraqi,
Sick of playin games, now barz got me-bored,
Only time dis bitch see f5's on a key-board,
try fly, U won't fly high with any rhymes,
Ur just a pussy who watched top gun too many times
but basically got told it wuz shit lol I like dis site dude, any chance of some help? Peace
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I need help with coming up with better concepts and executing punches. I'm fine with setups, flow and multies pretty much....
But it's like I'll come up with some really good ideas and the wording is either, well, too wordy or I just don't quite finish it right. I actually have a lot of concepts and a good vocabulary I just need help with wording and flipping things around.
Maybe someone could give me some concepts as an example and see what I come up with, then critique me. I'd appreciate it. Thanks guys
try coming with your punchline first and then get to the setup.
you have to make concepts a combination of metaphors, wordplays/nameplays, personal (makin fun of their avy, title, sig, profile, any previous quotes he may have made, and if you stay here long enough youll get to know people and have more personals on them).
think of a concept like "over your head" (I find phrases/sayings and idioms are a good thing to add in a punchline)
so over your could mean hes short, but also stupid, or hes low on the totem pole of skill.. shitty example but think of a decent concept then draw a box and on the outside of that box write all the ideas you can associate with it. once youve juiced it you should be able turn it into something.
Ok cool thanks man I appreciate it
anybody looking for honest feed tag me on their post and I'll do the best I can to tell you why your shit is fucked up.. no bullshit.
Help me please. Need to elevate again
^hope some of that helps a bit. Do some research on who ever the top guys are such as Salamander, Alphabet, King, Architype, Barcotic, Feeble Minded, Tim, $pitacular, Born 2 Kill, Beyond, King, God of War, Cry, John Hensley, and you are bound to find some really good stuff for research and how to formulate proper hit.
anybody willing to help me elevate. im always told my setups, concepts and multies are good but I need help with the wording a bit, and mostly just hard hitting punches. I setup good, then my punch comes too lax. I have great ideas and concepts, so idk if my shit is too wordy or its just the way im saying it. Maybe I need to be more direct, or indirect? anybody willing to help id appreciate it.
send me your best verse via PM.. I'll review it some time tomorrow morning and post it here.