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This is a dope piece... I'm talking about dope dope... aha
You used creativity and had nice imagery here man... you also had decent and dope flows with multies and didn't fall off-topic...
Scytso's Up...
Like what Accurit said... they don't know crazy!
I forgot to point out the dope lines that stood out the most...
With no time wasted he gathers his family and all their belongings
Off to find new lodgings, a new spot for their christmas stockings
Reality's grip is shocking when he finds himself left to a choice
You must protect your family now says the young man's inner voice
His thoughts produce offerings for his offspring and his own life
He then recalls a bomb shelter Grandpa built for him and his wife
Damnnnn!!! you are the new Stephen King with the story tellin,nice work man
love the topic,the whole context,flow all's A+.keep it up man.one
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def a good read. i kinda seen the ending coming for some reason because of I Am Legend. But other then that u stayed on point through out.. rhyming went good with the story. the concept has been a little played but u put it from a diffrent stand point; which was the story of a family surviving not just the world coming to an end. def a good drop homie.
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returning some feed...this shit was good for what it was, it's obviously written in a more poetic vibe in text format, which is different from what I do, so it doesn't appeal to me as much. but looking at it from a technical point of view, the topic was good, original, creative, the story came across clear and was woved together nicely, vocab on point, it was lyrical in a poetic sense as opposed to rap skill, nice shit though.
This was from 2009, but I thought this was very well -- written..
LOVE IT!! GOOD WORK!!
Good lord!
Phenomenal, had all the elements of a great story and more besides, the emotional aspect really shone through.
Simply a fantastic piece of writing combining some real shit with a potential horrifying event that I hope will never occur.
Reality's grip is shocking when he finds himself left to a choice
You must protect your family now says the young man's inner voice
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Whoo, that was smoking.