Round 1 - 7. Exalted vs 10. Justice Grimm (Exalted wins.)

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Verses are due Saturday and will be open until Monday.
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Minimum of 10, maximum of 16 (unless higher limit agreed upon)
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@EXalted @Justice Grimm

Here

Yeah 10

Ext needed

This guy’s who? Barely washed up… but I’ll give him a fast rinse
Been ages since we could exalt his posts, so this week I put him back in the past tense
Enough w/ the swagger chump… quick stab’ll have him slump
Closest he’s been to big guns? It’s his career mirroring Lil Pump’s
This week’s bye for me… why you take this disgrace further?
When voters see this smoke n gun the match’ll be open and closed like it was evidence for murder
Your names snuffed, n for me its on to the next
Do this so Swiftly I got Taylor applauding how I’m moving in from an Ex
Carve you that joker smile, forever laughing but w/o any gratitude
Make ya stock fall n have u eating out cans till your diet mirrors a positive attitude
10

I'm an evil bastard

Act like your best friend: I'm secretly planning a lethal stabbin
I see ur backturn then knife where ya Lattice go in & out in a weaving pattern
With poor reading comprehension his parents paid for classes..
Teachers graded that Literacy on tests. u'd take it home & they would TRASH it
Slime saying he'll win a fantasy Tolkien would laugh at, feel me?
Grim a worm, tongue in cheek; It's jokes you tryna pass lies off to a real king
After I kill em, any credit to his name is gone there's nothing left
Structured debt, w/ JG Wentworth when I do a number on em y'all won't forget
He don't get salutes in the streets, even if amended free speeches
Cancel 'Justice for alll' to see, I just Outclass em like the pledge of allegiance

This guy’s who? Barely washed up… but I’ll give him a fast rinse
Been ages since we could exalt his posts, so this week I put him back in the past tense
ehhh not feelin this one
Enough w/ the swagger chump… quick stab’ll have him slump
Closest he’s been to big guns? It’s his career mirroring Lil Pump’s
nahhh
This week’s bye for me… why you take this disgrace further?
When voters see this smoke n gun the match’ll be open and closed like it was evidence for murder
weak punch
Your names snuffed, n for me its on to the next
Do this so Swiftly I got Taylor applauding how I’m moving in from an Ex
weak again
Carve you that joker smile, forever laughing but w/o any gratitude
Make ya stock fall n have u eating out cans till your diet mirrors a positive attitude
super weak



vs



Act like your best friend: I'm secretly planning a lethal stabbin
I see ur backturn then knife where ya Lattice go in & out in a weaving pattern
worded bad but i like the wp
With poor reading comprehension his parents paid for classes..
Teachers graded that Literacy on tests. u'd take it home & they would TRASH it
nahh
Slime saying he'll win a fantasy Tolkien would laugh at, feel me?
Grim a worm, tongue in cheek; It's jokes you tryna pass lies off to a real king
weak
After I kill em, any credit to his name is gone there's nothing left
Structured debt, w/ JG Wentworth when I do a number on em y'all won't forget
dope
He don't get salutes in the streets, even if amended free speeches
Cancel 'Justice for alll' to see, I just Outclass em like the pledge of allegiance
ehh decent punch


use to seeing a few good punches from Grimm but didnt feel these bars imo. Ex had the JG wentworth bar that was dope and then a could decent wp's.

v. ex

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Justice Grimm

This guy’s who? Barely washed up… but I’ll give him a fast rinse
Been ages since we could exalt his posts, so this week I put him back in the past tense
Decent jab to open.
Enough w/ the swagger chump… quick stab’ll have him slump
Closest he’s been to big guns? It’s his career mirroring Lil Pump’s
Pretty light
This week’s bye for me… why you take this disgrace further?
When voters see this smoke n gun the match’ll be open and closed like it was evidence for murder
Decent concept, but got too wordy. Execution-wise this flopped for me.
Your names snuffed, n for me its on to the next
Do this so Swiftly I got Taylor applauding how I’m moving in from an Ex
Typo in the rhyme scheme (on instead on in) could be cleaned up, but think this was nice.
Carve you that joker smile, forever laughing but w/o any gratitude
Make ya stock fall n have u eating out cans till your diet mirrors a positive attitude
Whiffed for me. Maybe Im missing something?
10

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Quote:

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Originally Posted by Exalted.

I'm an evil bastard

Act like your best friend: I'm secretly planning a lethal stabbin
I see ur backturn then knife where ya Lattice go in & out in a weaving pattern
This was solid. Good stuff.
With poor reading comprehension his parents paid for classes..
Teachers graded that Literacy on tests. u'd take it home & they would TRASH it
Nah. Concept was there, execution, not so much.
Slime saying he'll win a fantasy Tolkien would laugh at, feel me?
Grim a worm, tongue in cheek; It's jokes you tryna pass lies off to a real king
I feel like Im missing a reference here.
After I kill em, any credit to his name is gone there's nothing left
Structured debt, w/ JG Wentworth when I do a number on em y'all won't forget
Not bad. Good jab.
He don't get salutes in the streets, even if amended free speeches
Cancel 'Justice for alll' to see, I just Outclass em like the pledge of allegiance
[B]Its not bad. But I just did a justice for all/pledge of allegiance flip a few weeks back so it feels stale.

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Close match up. I got Exalted edging it. 3-2.

JC wasn't a big fan of your verse this week. Thought evidence for murder was your best bar

Ex had lattice and wasn't feeling anything else.

Super close but thought ex had the better misses

Your names snuffed, n for me its on to the next
Do this so Swiftly I got Taylor applauding how I’m moving in from an Ex

vs

After I kill em, any credit to his name is gone there's nothing left
Structured debt, w/ JG Wentworth when I do a number on em y'all won't forget

Ok I’ve seen better from Grimm, this was a light verse but maybe it was purposely? Taylor Swift line was a decent concept and the evidence for murder one had potential but the execution was off. Ex doesn’t really have the typical insult/punch format so his material does really land to me alot but the JG Wentworth concept was actually really good. Could’ve been worded alot better but I’ll give you credit for the attempt because I actually think it was the best one of the battle. I gotta go with Ex based off that.

v/Ex

Grimm started out with past tense didnt really hit for me, and then the little pumps i found confusing, was it a perse? Did Ex work in a shoe shop? I dunno. Smokin gun had potential but wording. Swift was good but closer didnt hit.
Ex opener was worded weird but it worked after a couple of reads, think it needed a comma after lattice. Actulaay didnt mind the trash bar, think the litter a C might have gone over some heads. I got the tolkien, wormtounge, king connection, bar was ok/good. Had to google wentworth was ok/good. Didnt feel the closer.
V Ex was feeling more of his concepts, Grimms smoking gun and swift bars werent bad tho

Exalted wins 5-0.