Stay and Remain

[krakajack]

why do you chose to stay and remain?
with the field a heap of your comrades slain
and the insturment with blood's fresh stain
while the roots of memory grow insane

despatch ur kin with thrust and bain
poison hills of lands estranged
as you continue to fill the graves
lined with remenance of enchanted days

with hopes of dreams past regained
consumed readily to oponents gain
as the lust of mars doth refrain
why do you chose to stay and remain?

fear of change's aftermath
yet steped readily into its path
do you not remember forbarer's pain?
while roots of memory grow insane

to the heavens motives inane
as contenents crumble for fallen names
while roots of memory grow insane
why do you chose to stay and remain?


no explanations, i don't believe in those. i'd rather u try to find ur own meaning (it's there, u just gotta look for it).
gimme links and i will reply to ur shit. thanks.

[krakajack]

damn, people must not like reading my poems. up.

[krakajack]

FEED? PLEASE? up. i'll reply to anyone who replies to mine, jus drop a link.

[Verbatim]

sorry for this getting slept om...
but yeh, the meaning i kinda found like war or something like, why od they stay in Iraq when we caught buddy, or soemthing along those lines, i'm probly totally off, but o well.

NOw for the the poem itself it was pretty good, simple structure, good flow, and somple vocab, nice poem, i liked it
keep droppin

peace

[krakajack]

alright, thanks for the feed man. unfortunetlly this is still gettin slept on pretty hard. uppin once again.

[krakajack]

hello out there, anyone home?

[krakajack]

i don't understand, y doesn't anyone like to read my poetry? i feel sad

[shawty"B"]

dont feel sad!!! this is a gud poem, i think that the imagey is right along the lones of wat krem sed, it gives off a vibe of war.........i think this is a gud peice tho cuz war is sucha big part of lyf rite now....

....................fav part....................

to the heavens motives inane
as contenents crumble for fallen names
while roots of memory grow insane
why do you chose to stay and remain?


keep droppin.......

my utha peices

sweet caress
rewind time
so many

[krakajack]

damn, i never got any feedback really. i got 2 but everyone has more. i feel left out

[abysmal_delusion]

for the poem the flow was nice , the vocab was a lil simple but it worked for this certain peice....i enjoyed it..
everyone got the vibe of war when i read it i got something totally different more of the people who have died but yet they still remain in our minds when we try so hard to forget ..even in there graves lifeless they seem to linger around us and they never leave ....

great poem though keep writing!!!

[Tiptripp]

steady man, love it. Too busy to go into what i think the meaning is, dont have the time to do it justice. anyway, yea keep writing, methinks you have something, again, too busy to go into what i think that is.

[krakajack]

thanks a lot for the feed. still uppin. and like i said, just drop links if you want me to check something out.