Sharp. Vs Revan

[Neruda II]

60 lines max
house rules
3 votes=TKO
Topic:Men Don't Cry
Check in by tommorow
Drop due on sunday

Follow the rules strictly or you WILL be disqualified. (sorry, I just hate it when people make up lame excuses for not droppin)

[Neruda II]

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[Neruda II]

Men Don't Cry

"Listen hermanito, Do as I say not as I do
It's true, any second death can choose you"
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Brian was a teen, regular to you and me
He loved sleep, true romance and poetry
He had fears but he never shed any tears
Stayed strong with his girl for two years
He had large pride but rage was lurkin'
He loved to fight and pain was worth it
Had a present arogance to his presence
Grown men wanted to murder his essence
His younger brother cried for him late at night
Mournng at the thought that brian might die
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One unfortunate day brian was brought to shame
For the first time in his life he was afraid, its plain
They surrounded him by his house
His new rivals began to get loud
Crushed by his own friends, half to death
...Beaten to his last breath...
They thought they heard the police coming
Fast as rabbits, the bastards left running
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God..the poor teenager was beat to shards
His mind and soul were forever torn apart
From that spot he emerged with rage to surge
"Fuck school, fuck love, god and church!"
Slowly He rose from this pool of hurt
His bloody wounds were covered in dirt
So he made a chase, steady and hard pace
He had no idea that this day would seal his fate
Walking down the streets, he didn't speak
took 15 minutes but it seemed like a week
He stood at the parking lot
Suddenly the talking stopped
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He roared the names of his enemies
He stood strong as an incredible entity
Nothing but rage filled the heartless cage
His body had no emotion, ready to engage
"We're gonna beat the shit out of this kid"
Brian lifted his fist and swung at his lip
He managed a perfectly executed kiss
Quickly, Moved left and dodged a punch
threw another to make him throw up his lunch
Sharp. pain in his spine, attacked from behind
It was a knife, he knew he would die
but never wanted to rewind
He would die a man, fighting for what's right
But damn, the price was his life
They knew what they had done
Again, the began to run
His girlfriend saw the commotion
She walked, her heart was enclosin'
She couldn't bare to believe it
Her vision must be decievin'
She called brian's brother first
Throat of tears but still it thirst
He rushed to the scene where his brother lay serene
He kneeled, and the brother's eyes began to gleam

There I was eye to eye staring at the sky
"Please stop hermanito..real men don't cry"
At that second, at that exact time
It was certain that I, brian...Died

Explination: hermanito means little brother. In line 52, "threw another to make him throw up his lunch", Brian threw the punch and made the other character throw up.

[Neruda II]

Please close this. He now showed, Bastard made me write all of that for nothing.

[Halo_]

Sharp what the hell does this Dragon Ball Z shit have to do wit anything, come on dogg you can't be serious

[Neruda II]

Not sure what that is supposed to mean, but if you do not make yourself clear, then please don't say anything at all. Can some one please close this?

[Neruda II]

may some one please close this. Battle's open, not good.....

[Neruda II]

Damn, when will this be closed...I can't have another battle as long as this battle is opened.

Can a mod please close this?

[Neruda II]

I seriously need this battle closed since I have to substitute for another battle.

[Axe]

Closed.