Angel from Above

[Mesmerize]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133433
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Angel from Above


Alluring whispers disperse the somber tainted clouds
Mystic painted skies unfold acquainted visions aloud
Shrouds of golden mist fell upon the crowd with soothing bliss
A tranquil kiss descended to my cheek, forgetting all that exists
Enthralled yet appalled, feet grew roots into the ground
Confounded eyes arise, becoming magnetically bound
Trumpets begin to sound, feathers of golden satin unfurl
Still a silhouette in the sunset, has yet to reveal a girl
Teal eyes I can feel, swim through them into the ocean
Overcame with such emotion, drop my knees with devotion
She motions for me to rise and take her hand as she flies
Into a dwelling of everlasting life beyond the galaxy skies
In a world of tranquility, filling me with Gods symphony
My entity becomes transferred into a new soul of identity
Behold to capture majestic radiance within her delicate skin
Like porcelain antiseptic waters glow from the moons vivid grin
Hair of silken platinum flow beneath her expanded wings
Drapes lined of diamonds descend from her crown as she sings
Entering a dome filled of spring’s essence and pillowed thrones
Immaculate grass made of gold and roads of precious stones
Shown as the truest ecstasy, at such ease with harmony and love
Resting in eternal peace with my angel from above

[[.Perseverance.]]

Dam ur imagery and vocabularly are phenominal. You are not one of those poets who use big words and not understand what they mean, this was seriously great work. Whilst reading I had such a clear view in my head. Here are my favourite lines...

Shrouds of golden mist fell upon the crowd with soothing bliss
A tranquil kiss descended to my cheek, forgetting all that exists

She motions for me to rise and take her hand as she flies
Into a dwelling of everlasting life beyond the galaxy skies
In a world of tranquility, filling me with Gods symphony
My entity becomes transferred into a new soul of identity
Behold to capture majestic radiance within her delicate skin
Like porcelain antiseptic waters glow from the moons vivid grin

I dont know much about poetry but this was seriously great, without doubt I can imagine this being classed legendary. It had a great, clear, powerful vocabularly and had a nice rhyme scheme. Great work, I have learned alot from this.

[Perpetual]

yea, nice imagery and emotion
good rhyme cheme
nice ass poem

[Mesmerize]

feedback please?.......

[DaGyrlRemarqabL]

I am impressed. Extremely. This was a brilliant piece, nothing short of amazing. I actually felt a little more at peace by the time I was finished reading it. The imagery was incredibly well done, the whole piece was so vibrant and beautiful. Some of my favorite lines were:

"Teal eyes I can feel, swim through them into the ocean
Overcame with such emotion, drop my knees with devotion"

Gorgeous.

"In a world of tranquility, filling me with Gods symphony
My entity becomes transferred into a new soul of identity
Behold to capture majestic radiance within her delicate skin
Like porcelain antiseptic waters glow from the moons vivid grin"

Wonderful.

This piece was very powerful, it really moved me. May you write many more poems as equally brilliant as this one. I loved it.

~Gege.

[ILLusions]

What can I say to this? Wonderful!

You always seem to put out quality work...

"Behold to capture majestic radiance within her delicate skin
Like porcelain antiseptic waters glow from the moons vivid grin"

^^^^

Great lines! I read this and it just went together without missing a beat. But what would I expect from a fellow Po'ethics member...quality! Lol...keep it up.

[Mesmerize]

uppin

[phoenix808]

anything i write would just be repeating what the others said. very nice piece. I liked the mix between end rhyme and rhyme inside the lines.
fav lines

Hair of silken platinum flow beneath her expanded wings
Drapes lined of diamonds descend from her crown as she sings

very nice work.
peace

[shawty"B"]

WOW!..............im with pheonix, anything that i would say is a repeat of what has been said.......this is a real deep poem, i like it

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Drapes lined of diamonds descend from her crown as she sings
Entering a dome filled of spring’s essence and pillowed thrones
Immaculate grass made of gold and roads of precious stones
Shown as the truest ecstasy, at such ease with harmony and love
Resting in eternal peace with my angel from above

keep droppin
return tha favor
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133596

....bless

[Bloom.Quist]

Great poem. Cant say something someone else hasnt...o wait yes i can!
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[Mantra]

^ get a restraining order, lol...anywho....
good job Mes, this was an outstanding piece, i liked everything
about it, especially the imagery..which i thought was just
phenomenal...and well pretty much everything else has been said
by other peeps, but my nomination alone speaks for itself
great piece...keep it up
my fav. lines...

Teal eyes I can feel, swim through them into the ocean
Overcame with such emotion, drop my knees with devotion

[Content]

Alright this was a very good piece man
everyone goes through their vocabulary stage
and it either helps or hinders them when they
go on to better things, which is more songs
hopefully. Your structure was wierd but it was
done for a purpose and didnt take anything
away from the poem at all. Im trying not
to say everything thats been said already,
well almost already man this was good.

[DALC]

hey man,
This have xteme amount of vocabulary and some of the best imagery ive seen
Id tell you some points to improve on,but truthfully i dont see much wronge with it
ps.id apprieciate if you could post on some of my stuff;
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134471
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134395
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134161
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134032
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133485
Thanx man

[Foreshadow]

[My Thoughts]
Lums out of control but hes the ideal net stalker. Mes damn this was real nice I didnt even know you had this much skill because this is my first time reading from you. Your imaginary was nice vocab was great flow was amazing overall this piece just happened to come together perfect feeling every ounce of it. Nice job.

[CAMROK]

beautiful, brilliant.. yaddi yaddi.. lol

You beat me in the topical with this verse!.. hah.. if most people went against me on that same topic I think my verse could've won... but u had to go and write up this brilliant piece of work. Nice job, well done. Couldn't give u that much credit while the battle was going on, but now I can. Dope, keep up. Peace.