..Eclipse.. .Vs. TextTernal

[Exculptifactoriusness]

up 3..

[Mimesis.]

...Eclipse...
structure was pretty good...maybe a few of ur lines were a lil stretched...flow was good...u had a few metas....wordplay was pretty good....most of ur punches connected, despite u putting up no effort...pesronals were nice, especially that shit wit Dawson..that line was pimp...

..TextTernal..
structure was ok...almost all of ur lines were stretched...flow fell off a lil due to the stretchness....u had a few metas....some of the wordplay i actually liked, like the dolphins and text-son one...maybe a few of ur punches barely connected....personals were ok, i think u had 1...

Overall
TextTernal had better wordplay...both had some a few metas....Eclipse had the better structure and flow....more of his punches connected...and he had better personals...so basing off of that...Eclipse gets my vote...

VOTE - ECLIPSE

[Axe]

Open.

[Exculptifactoriusness]

*Sighs*

You could have dropped a vote amb!!!

1....

[And Death]

...Eclipse... - Your structure was alright because your lines were all fairly even. Your flow was nice so I don't have any criticism there. Your personals were good but some of them could of been worded a little better. Your punches were straight and hit well for the most part.

..TextTernal.. - Your structure was very poor because of the stretched lines. Your flow was bad because of the amount of syllables in each line. Your personals weren't very creative and didn't do much for you. Your punches were okay but your delivery of them wasn't.

Vote - ...Eclipse...

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[sabotage]

eclipse easily took this one... he had lots of personals in his verse. he flowed well. creative with concepts and wordplay. He had some ok punches but nothing grand. Good delivery clipse but could use some work. good vocab. admirable verse. Texternal you need some work... check the rb help forums. u need 2 work on structure. punches... personals... everything that constitutes as battling u need work on. only thing i could compliment u on was your wordplay... good stream of thought too actually... but not enough 4 the win..

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props 2 both
peace


vote - Eclipse