That was inasane, you are insane. You are a digusting little bastard, BUT i like it. haha, yo twisted that was real good.. I think everybody already explained what made it good so there is no point in repeating it.. but that was good...
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Man that was fucken tight dawg.Keep that shit comin,right now I want 2 hear another one.
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Shit, I bet you've been watchin Sin City or something. That's some sick shit, but on an artistic level, good vocab, pretty strong descriptive style, not much needed to be left for the imagination. That makes it a powerful piece, although the reaction stirred up isn't distinctly positive, it is definitely potent.
I can tell this came straight out of your mind and "onto paper" as it's got a bit of an unpolished feel, flow varies from very good to weak. Also, style wasn't consistent, in some places you were tryina sound artistic and deep and in others just like grimy and street. Some of the rhymes were too simple in some places.
Anyway, like I said, overall, twisted, powerful, unpolished. Three words.
this was a dope peice, like the visual, but at the same time it was kinda twisted....lol.......overall......i liked it, it was like i could smell and feel everything........o yea while ur at it, feedback one of mine, they floating around OM some where.........nice drop, keep it ep =D
i liked it twizted. u is very creative shorty. this story was kindy creepy tho but thats wat made it interesting. u had a tight flow n wordplay was excellent. keep it up
lol *does a dance*Originally Posted by -Twizted-
ok ur multis and wordplay hella dope.....the topic and floe was sick as hell.....structure u said it does not matter it kind of doesnt BUT it does help make it look beta....but yea this was mad sick mayne....u should keep droppin the real...
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not bad this was pretty crazy but fuck it anyway keep doing what u do playa
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that shit was don't wanna repeat what everyone said so nice yet disturbing
dude ur a kinda of sick man, man but good structure word play
and a good om dog
8/10 good shit keep doing it
can u check out 1 of my battles in my sig thanks
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Well twisted it was, you def had some nice word play and imagery. This piece was suspensful and poetic. It was a nice break from the shit you see in the battles- Keep doin ur thing
da rhymez dropped smoooove in da begginin, real poetic it wuz coo, weird n diffrent i hella ain in 2 dat twizted icp shyt dogh, but it wuz coo mayn
yo i was feelin that it was twisted yeah it does fit ur name, keep up the good work son, u had everything but the structure was a bit off and also work on ur vocab and ull be good keep up the good work lookin forward to seein more of ur drops aight
yea twiz i def liked this piece......real nice like you painted a picture i could see it all happining....with nice multis and flow....i rerally didnt see any flaw do it and the ending was fuckin phenomenal.....a very nice piece....very twizted but nice...keep it up mayne
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your completley out of your mind....but It was a dope piece you sick bastaed lol. Liked the imagery, I could really picture the necrophilia.....and I almost vomited. Thanks for that, I always wondered what it would be like ta have front row seats to a corpse porno. Very creative, the end was ill'est, the pun in the last line was dope...wrapped the piece up nicely, keep droppin
......and stay away from the balming fluid
all i can say is WOW..... my god.... twisted is definlty right here.... oh my goodness the imagery... it was so well described... the structure needs a bit of work at some points but nothin major.... crazy stuff.... next time i read another of ur poems im gonna be scared as hell before i read it.... sick stuff man... keep it up..lol
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