Camarac 2-1. Vs. Deviate 3-3.

[B.I.Detained.]

Checkins Due Saturday April 29th 11:59 PM Western
Verses Due Saturday May 6th 11:59 PM Western

Topic: Graffiti.

Vote on 3/4 battles. More if possible. Thanks.

[Deviate]

Check.. Good Luck.

[Baron Mynd]

There was a time our pencil and pads, were essential to have ..
.. Ive colourful binders, full of reminders, of our stencils and tags.
As dark would fall, we’d stand equipped - and start to scrawl, our manuscripts ..
.. We started small, just random quips - Apartment walls, our canvases.
Our art was all we had to give.
Our art was all we had to give…

- Flash Forward -

Ive been .. locked behind the bars of this deserted pile,
For taking part in cultural movement with suburban style.
An elite form of expression - I don’t tag to start wars ..
.. But what they see as vandalism, I look on as an art form.
Be it park walls or subways, ever since the late sixties ..
.. Ive been consumed by the colloquial speech called Graffiti
Inspired by the many compositions of Phase Two
He originated the styles STILL used by today’s youth!
With unique letter styles; Marker Pens in our waist bands
Alongside cans of bucket paint .. Stickers & spray cans
Our game plans for fame and .. A love of it all
.. Collage’s of 3D Piercing’s now cover the walls ..
Acting as a canvas to showcase stylized signatures
.. Their backdrops help portay a story without words ..
Most don’t understand that, it’s a visual language
The writers voice speaking through a series of graphics
.. And all this social outrage makes me proud to be me ..
.. because the longer its debated; THE LOUDER WE SPEAK! ..
You see the aspects of aesthetics give me old skool flash backs
.. To when we’d carry stencils & shoe polish in backpacks.
Early on I met this local head named Gordon Knight & ..
.. Formed the basis of a crew from our love of writing ..
We’d collaborate in Crylon, create and share designs
Sketched detailed letter fonts .. just to spare the time
We were constantly creative; stood out from the others scene
Stayed bombing trains & bridges with various colour schemes
.. When I was finally caught .. I rued the day ..
The cops charged ME with all of the tags my crew had sprayed.
D.S.C, a rival crew, were responsible for shopping me ..
.. Now ive seventy counts on ‘Malicious Destruction Of Property’
Why didn’t I stick to scratching? Or spinning on cardboard?
This shit sucks.
.. Caged for the love of an art form ..


DaMn.

[Deviate]

Graffiti

All I've got is the wall, dragging nails across the brick,
Fingers numb, bleeding into the thick drips of paint and sick.
Nose to the rough edge, smooth curves and torn lines,
Ledges break parallel shapes of pure artistic rhymes.
Amidst the grime and slippery slope of lies and crime,
The cries are written into the wall with sighs of mime.
Unspoken, yet admitted for all to see undoubtedly,
Beyond belief, but portrayed with such convicted reality.

Tears of white aerosol tickle the air as they fly,
Dancing, before settling magnetically into the pie.
An amalgamation into creation's undiscovered nation,
Expanding glaciation as movements freeze into station.
Temporarily permanent the emotion glares from the wall,
Barely held up, yet so powerful, it's impossible for withdrawal.
Passers gasp, tears flow, painful memories collide,
A ghostly image of my brother has unceremoniously dried.

Celebrated as an inner-city masterpiece, recognized by most,
Yet I receive no praise, no money, no sympathy in the day's post.
I'm a faceless, loveless, loner in a world of collectivism,
Many remember who I once was, before I sank into cynicism.
Brother, shot dead, his image is all we have left,
Yet now they wash it away, insensitive of people's death.
The water pours from his eyes, as he slowly fades,
I cry a slow goodbye, as I lapse into a monotonous daze.

Dismissed as 'Graffiti', a detrimental term, it was love,
You may have faded from here, but you're happy above.

[Deviate]

Right.. All ready for votes then.. Nice work Cam.

[Born To Kill]

Dev...

Strong, solid work here. Good emotion...nice story.

But...sorry, dude...

Cam just killed this.

First off, the rhymes, man...Cam was pulling them outta everywhere.
Shit flowed like water.

Plus, the descriptions were really on point.

I can't get too much more into this cuz, personally, I think graffiti...without the consent of the building owner...

Is bullshit.

Go spray paint your own fuckin house.

If I owned a shop, store, whatever...and caught some little fucker graff'ing my shit...

I'd spray paint the inside of his fuckin mouth.

But I know good writing vs. better writing and Cam had the better verse.

Vote: Cam

He just brought so much more to the table.

Peace

[Glory]

unique styles and approaches are always make it hard to choose...

Dev-good piece, great emotion and diction. Nothing really wrong at all, very enlightening. Other than that, not much else to say. nice job.

Cam-also a good piece, brilliant imagery and flow. your piece actually brought grafitti to life. For that, and what I deemed as a more interesting approach with story of a story/perspective.

v/Cam

[EYE RONIC]

Hmm, close one.

Cam - ok, here goes. When you actually started the piece, you were very steady, very smooth. But when you returned to the current day, when you were in prison, I felt there was not alot to it. You had good description of how bad the cells in prison were, but I dont feel you hit rock bottom, emotional depth wise. I think you couldve used more energy, more fright, more...imagery. I still enjoyed your piece, dont get me wrong.

Dev - Nice man, real nice. I loved the way you described the paint and the cans and the walls and shit man, very descriptive. All of the stanzas were perfect, yoru imagery and use of vocabulary was unforced, and very fluent. I love your style, you have a very unique sense, both poetry and rhythm mixed. But, the only flaw you had was the flow of the piece. It went on and on, same flow through the entire thing, basically unchanging. Your ending bar was so meaningful, very moving in an emotional feel.

Nice job both, very nice. V/ - Deviate

[Bounce]

nice battle here

but cam owned this technicaly. his verse was crafted so well an opponent had to really drop a monster ass verse for the win. didn;t happen, deviate, sorry bro you did a fine job, but it was no where close to that of cams verse. He did such a thorough job on his peice he left yours feeling incomplete. You have some nice style and imagery, but those components alone are not enough to win against a verse with such fluid flow. His lines just melted like butter, too much for deviates verse. I think certain aspects in deviates verse were better, but over all, it just didn't stack up.

vote cam

[NiNjah Red]

yeah i couldnt get into the content too interestingly..... but it went decent from both far as telling a short tale is concerned........... both had sum good imagery ideas............ i felt cam displayed a higher craft of words tho in this joint... i found deviates vocabulary a littl misleading in oplaces...... for to me yo verse had sum strange word pairings and insertions of words bordering on oxymoronic w/o explanation......... temporarily permanent?.................and i mean i belive i have a fair old vocabulary of my own.......but lines like this--

An amalgamation into creation's undiscovered nation,
Expanding glaciation as movements freeze into station.

just dont gel to me ...... i mean it just diddnt seem to mean nething to me......... and i'm not gonna study someones lines for half an hour to get the meaning............. cam had a nice writing style . and everything rolled str8 forward enuff to be totaly understood.........


vote-cam

[Facts Machine]

v/Cam

He def had the better verse in every aspect. Deviate had a creative idea but just didn't stand out in every other way, i pretty much just liked how he approached it but the rhymescheme was blah. Cam had crazy rhymen in this and flowed well... he organized the story in an ill way that made me understand everything. His focused more on the art form than deviates, dev's just felt like it was more of a rest in peace topic.

[T-Square]

As most said above, Cam just hit it with great originality, as well as great style,
Deviate, yours was very good, dont get me wrong, anyone elses vurse and you probably woulda won it,

but still truth be told,

\/ Cam

[Tim]

Camarac wins 3-1.
Deviate loses 3-4