Topic 4-3. Vs. Born To Kill 4-3.

[B.I.Detained.]

Topic 4-3 Vs. Born To Kill 4-3.

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Topic:I am what I am, cuz..

Vote on 3/4 battles. More if possible. Thanks.

[Topic]

And the rematch is here...Im coming with something different style wise. I've seen you've picked it back up since the last time we went at this. Good luck, duke.

[Born To Kill]

Good luck to you too.

[Born To Kill]

I dress deceptively, so they never suspect it’s me...
But when I request my fee you can expect knees to bleed.
Its heated lead for those who’ve cheated; fled...
Cuz their conceited heads have deleted dread.
They have no fear...change of city, new frontier...
But debts so severe lack pity, they never disappear.
And I’m sincere about collecting...that, or teaching a lesson...
Cuz they insist on disrespecting...until they see my weapon.
Then they start stressin, fearin the Smith and Wesson...
And avoidin my question which requires no guessin.
“Do you have my money?” It’s a simple yes or no...
I don’t find it very funny; you skipped out on quid pro quo.
I provided a service; but you wouldn’t reciprocate...
Now you’re all nervous cuz interest always proliferates.
What you originally owed doubled, can’t be covered by ATM...
Plus expenses for the trouble of tracking you down again.
It’s always the same...the way it ends; I’m rarely ever paid...
So I unleash my silenced friend until kneecaps are sprayed.
Until I’ve created a cripple, until crawling’s all that’s left...
Cuz a wheelchair that fits will...remind men to honor debts.
A lot of sharks smell blood, get thrown in a frenzied zone...
Won’t stop till there’s a flood...of plasma from the dome.
But I’ve never seen it that way when I loan my loans...
A life for money...no...I just want them to atone.

I am what I am cuz...
The world needs retribution delivered to its students...
And I’m the solution when people get stupid.
It’s not prudent to run out on promises made...
But the stupid still do it...and it’s only themselves they betray.

I am what I am cuz...
There’re no angels on earth to guide the weak-minded...
Who run away with worth only temporarily provided.
So I set them up for a sit down...that most likely lasts forever...
Cuz when you empty that many rounds, legs are pretty much severed.

I am what I am cuz...
The stupid need time to think, uninterrupted time...
Doesn’t matter there’s no ink; you don’t break contracts in crime.
So I remind them of being a child, “Sit and think about what you’ve done”...
But grown men’ll only sit awhile...that’s why I have to use a gun.

But I REALLY am what I am cuz...
Help’s needed in hardened times; that’s fact, no debating...
And banks only judge a man by his credit rating.
It’s desecrating; their relating...to regular peeps...
Who worry about bills till they’re unable to sleep.
So just ask and I’ll leap on the problem, throw money at that shit...
Then you can watch it fall like autumn; and save your shattered wits.
I’m revered by so many, who got their lights cut back on...
Or owed 1000’s to the hospital, but now that debt’s gone.
I’m the neighborhood banker, loan officer on the corner...
Who can help you bury your loved one if you’re an out of work mourner.
I’m never unreasonable, though I could...even late payments I permit...
Cuz I wanna be SOMEONE in the hood...someone who helped it.

[Topic]

I'de be grateful to have till tonight. If I cant get that then please dont kick me out of the league. I know I had 2 weeks I just didnt like anything I wrote. But it will be done tonight. Thanks.

[Topic]

I’m the way I am, cuz…

I’m tethered down on a weathered mound
Just waiting the day, for the heaven sound
A post in the ground, and a woven rope
My stolen hope, When I just want to go n' elope...
With someone to tope. But no. Visitors stare
Tip their hat and reveal their hair, they don’t care
as I revolve in my lair, Resting in ones eyes
Strangers left tongue tied, but your sons deprived
And I wonder why..?
And I hear my call, you remember the heavenly sound?
Back in the day when I was tethered down...
On a weathered mound...
Well the angles sang, and along came a mangled gang
Of spirits and abnormalities leaping and jangled with fame
My ankle in pain, from the sudden drop in a crater
I glided to my feet, to get a chance to gain gray fur
I was wearing away at this age for sure, but at what precision
Every second
No, every moment I could feel age make an incision
Forever and a minute, I was tortured but now revealed
Not only am I gods son, But I'm also been healed
If he can revive you with fear, then expand your ability with mere fame
Well then he doesn’t need my help, all you need to know is I came
But at what price, so I could teach and reveal those masked
And leave the cast, with questions forever not asked
So you can manipulate with hacks, and expand the slack
Developed these common knacks, of changes
When you cant change certain things that don’t need changing
Look I'm on pictures you have hanging, but really...
You don’t believe in what I was saying...Its silly
All of these materials for the publics eye
Makes me want to drop and cry
Because I’ve seen War mongers wear crosses
When we will never except them when they die.

I’m the way I am cuz, you make me this way

[Baron Mynd]

Vote - Born

I really didnt enjoy Topic's verse this week to be honest, it all seemed rather thrown together and dis-jointed. I mean, using multies and a well-structured rhyme scheme is great and all, but this came across like you were just using multies to say you had used them. The whole opening stanza read like you'd just thrown random multi-syllable words together and tried to form SOME sort logic in them. It was just terrible to be honest, there was no coherency in the couplets, it lacked any real drive or direction, and strayed from the actual topic more times than I care to count. The verse was simply, poorly put together and seemed to lack any logical train of thought or creative idea. Im sorry if it sounds harsh, but I feel you wasted my time, and the leagues, by posting this garbage up.

I’m tethered down on a weathered mound
Just waiting the day, for the heaven sound
A post in the ground, and a woven rope
My stolen hope, When I just want to go n' elope...
With someone to tope. But no. Visitors stare
Tip their hat and reveal their hair, they don’t care

^ That is just absolute garbage. Its like you rambled on nothing for the whole stanza.

Born won this easily. By far the better verse in my opinion, it wasnt even close.

[Bounce]

In my honest opinion this was really a one sided battle here, I didn;t see anythign stand out in topics verse what so ever. Born dropped a beast of a verse that demanded his opponent drop on another level. That did not happen here and I give this to born hands down. When I first read it, before topic dropped, I thought to myself, no fucken way topic is goign to match that, let alone beat it. I'm jsut glad you didn;t drop that against me man...

damn nice to see you tearing shit up this week born, wow... great verse...

Vote born

[Born To Kill]

Thank you, gentlemen.

[Philly®]

here's my homo vote j/k

V/born

born greart solid verse... even better for droppin first.. i kno sometimes people like to go second so they can kno how hard to try n stuff.. i guess u figred you'd rape the battle n leave ya opponent with no way of winning.. cuz that's kinda how i saw it

topic- peice wasn't bad at all, but keeping it simple and real... unless you pulled a elephant out of a baby hat.. then you lost from when he posted his peice.. but prop's for giving effort and atleast showing up

[Glory]

both had good pieces, but...

v/Born

for that extra ounce of complexity and imagery. Topic, you didn't seem to put out as much as you could've, although good, Born just topped it.

[EYE RONIC]

alrighty then..

Born - Wow man, blew me out of the water with ease.

I dress deceptively, so they never suspect it’s me...
But when I request my fee you can expect knees to bleed.

Like WTF, that was the best opening line I've seen this week, I applaud you for that bud. Also, your emotion was sooo descriptive, I was like, sitting up straight in my chair, full of suspense. I loved how you put this together, just the imagery itself hit pretty hard. Another line, was this one...

So I set them up for a sit down...that most likely lasts forever...
Cuz when you empty that many rounds, legs are pretty much severed.

You amaze me once again. Another best part about your drop was that you put "I Am What I Am, Cuz.." and then starting rhyming again. That was beautiful, it made me think of a Sal-V track, but alot more descriptive, alot more emotional. Great shit, but I gotta move onto Topic.

Topic - Very disappointing. I liked how you dropped against Bounce a couple weeks back in the HW match. You were rushed I can see, and hopefully thats true because what you've dropped here was not your usual piece.

I’m tethered down on a weathered mound
Just waiting the day, for the heaven sound
A post in the ground, and a woven rope
My stolen hope, When I just want to go n' elope...
With someone to tope. But no. Visitors stare
Tip their hat and reveal their hair, they don’t care
as I revolve in my lair, Resting in ones eyes
Strangers left tongue tied, but your sons deprived

Those were your best lines, simply because of the decriptivity. You didnt really have a moral to the story, Born's was alot more thought of, oftenly referred to. I dont think you put much effort into this, I cant really say anything. Born dominated you. Hopefully you can come back next week and put more effort.

V/ - Born

[NiNjah Red]

vote-born........ most def a more intricate and skilfully crafted verse.... i sort of like the way topic blew up his flow a bit..... but topic diddnt dliver with the inner content..... i mean rhymes and flow was all good.. but born rhymes and flow was sic for this 1..... and would of taken a lot to beat by any means...........born had elevated wording and delivery........... while topics wording was messy in a lot of places and needed more clarity...................

[Facts Machine]

Born: I liked it a lot, the way u approached the topic was ill and creative. You had a nice rhymescheme that flowed well with sick language and references.

Topic: It was just decent, the rhyming was decent, nothing special and u flowed alright, but it didn't seem all that creative. I really didn't enjoy it, it was just a normal read... the way u approached it had potential but imo it was just made in a boring way.

v/Animal Mother

[T-Square]

BTK, defiatly gets my vote, great damn vurse, Topic, you came pretty good, but BTK absolutly killed the topic, sorry thats not a pun.....

OVerall I just enjoyed the read and the imagry that he layed out with the vurse,
It was damn near flawless, yet I wish It woulda been closer, Topic, I dont wanna say you didnt try, it just seemed like you were rushed...

\/ BTK