Hello Madness, Have a Drink

[HighEngineChief]

Hello Madness, Have a Drink



There are no shapes but those with
Slender necks, brimming with the savory blood
Of grapes.

I have lost the image of abstract happiness,
Only contempary glasses of numbing content
Hold the light to form a prism, hold a hue;
I hold them high, and toast to the dogs
(You share my black and white world).

But only monstrous muses accompany my ear,
Whispering dark secrets of forgotten lust;
“The Chateau is more of a looking glass when empty.”
Wisdom glistens off the bottle, mocking my
Curiosity, I step over a dead cat to get a better look.

My tongue quivers at the very advance
Of Chablis, I anticipate the texture and taste.
The demons giggle intoxicated bellows of loath as I
Swallow the thick nectar of woeful vines.
Bordeaux -The host to Madness,
Welcome my old friend;
Please, have a drink.

We sit and sip for hours into the night,
Our minds toiling with ideas grand and lustrous.
I make a reservation at Purgatory and bid
Farwell to the monsters of memory and regret.
Tonight it’s just me and Madness,
And we’re going to paint the town Gamay red
(Or Pinot white)

[HighEngineChief]

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[Spoken Deity]

yeah, I'll check links tomorrow...
Now for the feed...

You've got a very nice little poem here... Very 'not RBish' which is refreshing a lot of the time. The things I dug were bits of the imagery. You simply had some great, original imagery that connected well with the image... Great job on that. Your tone and sentence structure was great. I might have mixed around with the opening stanza's sentence break but other then that, everything fit. Good language, vocab, all of that. Some of your imagery, however, did seem a bit over the top given the rest of the tone. There was a place or two where I didnt feel the image fit/made sense. Other then those few lines, I see a nice, clean little poem.

hit the collab with spekz and I huh?

[Vince]

whoa homie.....This piece was tyte cause it was just effervescent and fluid....you had dope usage of language and the flow was cool.

I liked the structure and the three line setup of the 1st stanza.....really pleasing to the eyes....


these were my fav. lines though:

My tongue quivers at the very advance
Of Chablis, I anticipate the texture and taste.
The demons giggle intoxicated bellows of loath as I
Swallow the thick nectar of woeful vines.
Bordeaux -The host to Madness,
Welcome my old friend;
Please, have a drink.


dopeness/

[Lelouch]

This was a very well written piece, i liked the language
used and word choices just made the whole piece
flow together so well, overall its a great read.
keep writing.

[-Answer-]

“The Chateau is more of a looking glass when empty.”

that line was sick, the whole piece was good. It seems like alcohol is more like a key that opens your emotions, so that comes across to me as after you've drank it, you reflect on your life. I thought the entire piece was pretty good.

[HighEngineChief]

uppity

[Alphaeus]

Really refreshing read here bro.
A nice solid concept and a take on it not usually seen on RB.

I dug this and thought your use of language was exceptional.
You structure was nicely done and it had a certain type of flare, it wasn't simplistic.
Imagery was on a par with what I've seen from you before, no complaints.
Well thought out and well executed description with a close eye to vivid detail.
I loved it bro, very, very nice play on words and you had your own style going on.
You are one of the writers I look forward to seeing a piece from you.
IE should be interesting and if we meet, everyone will witness a great match.
Respect brother.