WK 11: Cai(6-4) vs. CLA919(3-4) [Cai Wins]

[OG Maestro]

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@Cai @CLA919

Pick 1 Topic from the list & create a verse from it
Topic list is here,
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...18#post8473418

Check ins due on Friday by 4:29PM
Verses are due on Saturday by 11:59PM
Voting ends on Monday by 11:59PM
New matches are set up on Tuesday's Morning(Before Noon)
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3 Votes are required this week. Every missing vote results in a -1 vote for your next SS League battle.
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Goodluck!

[CLA919]

check...

[CLA919]

“ Go to Heaven for the climate, Hell for the company."
― Mark Twain

The things that we do just to make it through
Have you wondering what the fuck was I to do
I believe in God AND the other fallen angel…
But I can’t punk out cause I see the other Stalin (stallen) angle
Can’t believe in one without the other
It’s like turning on my own fucking brother
It’s like comforting a widow or a grieving mother
Knowing, you still know another
Well I was just trying to make sense of it all
They chose to live life up and I chose to ball
They look down on you and try to make you look small
I don’t know who he is, but believe me I know his call
When it’s torture I do a line just to numb up
When it’s Fortier I play the ditz just to dumb up
Use my 4.0 for these streets and the plans I can drum up
And I ain’t got a team no more, dolo on the come up
Street sweeper, cleaning all the scavenger scum up
My pen, it turns into a ouji
Weeding cowards out like water out of a squeegee
The eyes in back of me
Have always been eyes that only I can see
They bring me comfort in my terrors throughout the night
I hear the whisper as if children cry like a lullaby when I’m searching without the light
And it ain’t pretty, and it ain’t cute
And where I am going I hardly dispute

So I manned up, I started banging bullies on their backs
Get my fortune read just to forewarn of attacks
To make it thru I used to drive with burners under my seat
I ran so much that I deserve the credit for flooding the street
And don’t you think I feel bad for evading that pod
But life equals up in the end somehow to uneven the odd
The 3 little pigs, spent their careers trying to squeeze me
3 in the hole and I got one just for popping breezy
And you look at me and think my life is all fucking easy
At any given moment we can be called just to appease he

And you know Valhalla’s fable...
And there’s no doubt I am eating at that table
I know the power of my spirit horse when drilled in life and death
And I am on borrowed time so you best believe my brethren get my last breath
I know I suffer in the next so let me be free now
And I ain’t trying to repent cause we reep what we sow
Hell of a decision, die, kill, or go to jail
Either way we set up to fail
So what do you believe in? … heaven or hell?

I think the la de dah church shit got most folk under a spell
I mean whose to say whose story they tell
I mean, let’s just be real why else the angel fell
I wanna hear two sides, please tell me a book was written
I mean it’s more than once shy and twice bitten
It’s all stories just like the little kitten that lost it’s mitten

Judged for the things we do
Judged by who
Judged by everyone
Judged these days even if you legally own a gun
Judged by your past, for the past shit you done
You even judged if you stand firm or you decide to run
Judged for your son, judged for your daughter
Ok by you all I don’t believe in that order
The order to tall
So give me the chains and strap me to that wall
All because I jumped in when I heard a prisoner call
And if we all write, then we all right
A gift of intellect, use it for sight
Use it for peace, use it for the fall
Use it at least, but when you do – just give it your all
And I can go on for 100 fucking bars
But I know in the end when I wake up it’d be in fucking MARS
Never fear God, a true leader doesn’t use fear just to lead you
Never fear the devil, cause I believe Jada --- he see through
Fear no man, only fear what you just might do
And judge no one for what they do just to get thru.

[OG Maestro]

@Cai

Verse due tonight

[CLA919]

@Day-day Thanks for the feedback, if you'd like to see more of my work, I suggest Upper Echelon ;o)

[143]

CLA919 when it comes to writing in the topical battles that you drop in, I notice that you're focus on the flow as it pertains to an audio drop. The reason that I'm saying this is because your lines have a low syllable count that doesn't give you much to work with as far as pulling out depth in your drops. The whole direction of the verses was great and you had it working for you but I was looking for that deep end where you pull out the mega images of Heaven and Hell. You had some good representation but I felt that it needed to be more intricate, especially going against Cai who lives in the intricate world of storytelling and prose. And Cai, your verse was the one that you should have dropped against me last week because you pulled out this semi abstract approach that works well. You are a technical beast and have a smooth knack of stringing internals and multies without sacrificing flow. My vote goes to Cai.

[Stranger]

here is my quotables for this battle, overall explanation will follow each set of quotables, and a final explanation will follow each set of quotables.

CLA919
They bring me comfort in my terrors throughout the night
I hear the whisper as if children cry like a lullaby when I’m searching without the light
And don’t you think I feel bad for evading that pod
But life equals up in the end somehow to uneven the odd
And if we all write, then we all right
A gift of intellect, use it for sight
Fear no man, only fear what you just might do
And judge no one for what they do just to get thru.

What I always liked when I read your verses is you don't rely on multies, and I think thats something were all guilty of including my self, in these situations people either have the single syllable capability or they don't rhyme at all, you do well at the single syllable style and you should try to perfect that.

I see so many people that think in order to have a good flow, you have to whore the usage of multies just because, and you did a good job staying on point and you did you here

CAI
So…Shall we move forward away from this tragedy?
The chastity of the devil delays love with strategy
We dilute life’s facades until there’s nothing left to show.
Blessed to grow, we pace backwards with less in tow
The new Cyclops of our generation is the eye of the storm,
defying the norm, escalating into lies we forewarned
Warlords boxing, storm doors blocking the gale force blows.
Prevail Morse code, fail forth with such frail, worn bones
Measure widths of progress so the height assembles with
all of your hope, treasure it because all is lost when the weather hits.


exact opposite of CLA here, your usage of multies sometimes seem like a crutch, and if your going to use them like that you need to break out from the norm, with that being said you obliterated the topic here, and that's what makes a good verse, you can lose this battle due to CLA having way more content than you, but the way I'm looking at it so far is in you edging this
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Overall
This is a battle of 1-syllable vs multi-syllable styles, usually the multi-syllable would prevair on its merit alone, but CLA was able to hang with CAI here, and its rare a 1 sylalble head can fuck with multi-syllables, cla did an awesome job staying with cai here, and if cla was more consistent throughout his content he would of got this, like I said, cai obliterated the topic here and I think thats why he is going to win.
v/cai

[CLA919]

Thank you @Dia appreciate the feedback, I really do.

[OG Maestro]

On a 3-0 vote, Cai Wins.

Closed.