old verse

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here's an old verse...just wanna see what you guys think...feedback is much appreciated!



yo the game mine...summon demons when i spray rhymes
travel through portals and break time
i leave corpses on the floor like Michael did
your whole head explode when the rifle hit
thats why life's a b1tch
im the definition of what cypher is
my flow sick...so slick
my soul lit...define what cold is
smoke piff...bury your corpse under stone bricks
wont quit...break their bones and claim the throne
16's like when grenades explode
yall fake im dope...yall hate im hope
my state unknown
source of the cure like where haze is grown
made from the blood of the sages clone
change the tone...a slave that broke the chains alone
the great divine...scribble lyrics on every page i find
made to shine...spit a verse and cage your mind
yall rhyme like fake kids i shine like Ma$e did
yall politicians get high and rape pigs
my mind what change is
tryna stay sane...brain's in a strange state
page plain...fill you with nails like that Quake game
Cain slain...this the same pain i maintain
evolve your style you stay the same way
embrace the grey days...im the light when the sun shine
battle me?...ill end your life with a punchline
im the god of war...i conquer man
my thoughts are banned
raw bars leave claw marks like monster cans
my speech is iller...rip through your spleen and liver
gonna be awake for a while cuz the speed is bitter
you weak im sicker
you cant relate cuz what i see is bigger
murdered my ex now the sea is with her
the evil spitta...blessed like a Jesus picture
yall lack knowledge of the great lessons
never battle the beast with fake weapons
ill make your lungs collapse like snake venom
if you never known hell you gonna hate heaven
frail peasants...tryna steal my shine
im the opposite of feeble lines...the deepest mind
speak in rhyme...burning lyrics i wont be needing mine
i feast and dine...on the screaming souls the demons find
that's why im the best at this
bless the script and cause the rest to quit

[Lenox]

How old are you bro?

[Soule]

Multies are nice. I can tell you're trying to write to the beat because of the wording and lyrics. Comes off very much like a free style. Would like to see you tackle something conceptually but as is not bad. Keep writing.

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How old are you bro?

im old!...haha...im 40...started writing lyrics in 2003 (:

Multies are nice. I can tell you're trying to write to the beat because of the wording and lyrics. Comes off very much like a free style. Would like to see you tackle something conceptually but as is not bad. Keep writing.

thanks so much for the feedback!

[mynameageef]

Good lord.

On fire start to finish.

im the god of war...i conquer man
my thoughts are banned
raw bars leave claw marks like monster cans
^
For raw inventiveness and wordsmithery, that sick

The Quake line was a nice throwback for me too

Flawless.

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^^ thanks alot fam