life

**nano15** · February 5th, 2004, 02:07 PM

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niggaz think life hard but yall niggaz don't know life ain't but a show thats y i flow on this shit i keep it real and nigga ain't doin shit but makin a deal and orderin a meal so seal the deal wit lil kiddie meal, bitch don't say nuthin jus stop buggin and i won't say shit but lick ur mamas clit remember my name and don't say the lord's name in vain cuz shit man my nigga lunatic will yall asses away and cuz nigga im here 2 stay.
peace,nano15

**lunatic** · February 5th, 2004, 02:14 PM

o.k nano it striaght but don't be kissing my ass just playing dog keep it up and u could do better

**nano15** · February 5th, 2004, 02:18 PM

thanx man jus getting warmed up aight

**tdubs** · February 5th, 2004, 02:32 PM

this was aiight
nothin special
i think the wirtten structure is what took away form it
real hard to follow that shit when it's in paragraph form
feel me?
anyways man keep postin

**Mistral** · February 5th, 2004, 02:47 PM

You need to elevate.....dont put it in paragraph form, line on top of line works much better and it helps with the flow.....work on better content as well....your concept was ok but i think it could have been done better.....but elevate and keep at it man.