Melophobic Storm

[Jon]

Melophobic Storm
By Jonathon





Boom! Crash! Crackle!
I'm thrilled to touch Mrs. Elise's ivory lips,
connecting enough to make Beethoven jealous.
To waltz in B flat, just for a minute,
while Minuet G rocks my world.
The Beetles crawl up my memory lane,
to drop by and say hi,
as they fade off into history.
Tupac shakes hands with Bach,
and my fingers tap dance on elephants tusk,
polished, and carved painfully to perfection.
Great artist jot down notes,
as they flow through the core of their hearts,
and float to the cloudy blankets of pride.
Yes, you historians have rested for now,
hear the thundering call of despair.
Come back and rain your greatness on
the tree of intelligence below your throne.
We miss the classics!

[Bilayer]

This piece was put together very unique i like how you used alot adverbs and it iwas very descriptive you had a nice vibe to this piece johnathon the only thing i hate about this piece was that its short as shit i wish you would of made it longer cuz its like the moment i started to feel the piece seriously it was the end of it but chea i likd the drop alot mann imma quote my favorite lines

as they fade off into history.
Tupac shakes hands with Bach,
and my fingers tap dance on elephants tusk,
polished, and carved painfully to perfection.
Great artist jot down notes,

This had a great freelance rhyme scheme and well thought out i like how you did this piece once again nice drop john

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[Catastrophe]

pfftt.

[Jon]

^ the fuck outta here..

uppin

[Twixn...]

to drop by and say hi,

the line before this one was dope... but i thought this one threw off the whole movement... seemed out of place a little too much of a shift in the style...

but overall this was a good peice... had some interesting parts its a topic that has been done before... you had a nice take on it but i think ive seen peices similar to this one... good work though i liked you choice of words for the mostpart... and you brught it all togeter with the basics well done.

[Jon]

thanks uppin

[Spoken]

thanks for elaborating on my topic..lmfao. i wrote of the person behind the piano you wrote of the art. we should have collabed..lmfao.

nice piece and very nicely assorted vocab and emotion, the metaphors i realy liked. how you used the truth and the facts in the pice to pertainon a metaphor that makes it creative

I'm thrilled to touch Mrs. Elise's ivory lips,
connecting enough to make Beethoven jealous.
To waltz in B flat, just for a minute,
^^
nice metaphor jon.

and my fingers tap dance on elephants tusk,
polished, and carved painfully to perfection.
Great artist jot down notes,
^and another...

nice piece put together here man....realy enjoyed it....we still need to collab

[Black House]

Yeah, I liked it pretty well... Except i also wished it was longer. Lol. But i liked it.

The Beetles crawl up my memory lane,
to drop by and say hi,
as they fade off into history.
Tupac shakes hands with Bach,
and my fingers tap dance on elephants tusk,
polished, and carved painfully to perfection.
Great artist jot down notes,
as they flow through the core of their hearts

I liked that part the best... keep your shit up and holla at me for your next drop.


Check mine...




The Eternal Poem.

[Jon]

uppin