upps just want to see what some more of you have to say
upps just want to see what some more of you have to say
Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
But how you fall doesn't matter
Its how you land
This piece was really fucking dope fam. Glad I have you in my crew.Real fluent drop here every aspect of poetry was done in this piece. Original all in all. Emotion,Imagery all just fucking everything nyce drop sorry for the lack of feed I was going to wait and leave it but I said why not tell you what everyone else has been telling.
-Nyce.
Not gonna lie, shits dope. It really has nothing to critique, because it captivates the reader the whole time, which is what good poetry should do
XXXL
The Extra Large Emcee
well alot has been said, and yeah its good to see rust not effecting you at all thats usually an indication your a true writer at heart, the imagery and emotion were some of the best I've read from this month man, its mos definitely worth a nom. but theres no reason to second. its plain dope and i liked it, stay up man.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ou-363353.html
RTF please
AI
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Ending was pretty dope, started a little slow though homie. Nothing flawed about that though, so do not worry bro. The wording was pretty well chosen, and carried the flow quite a ways as far as being catchy goes. It was straight forward. Fell off the tongue well. Your iamgery was really vivid dude. Left a view visual images in the mind here and there. I felt that you could've done more BEFORE the ending. But that's just me. Emotion was really nice man. Keep writing...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...95#post6272095
Okay first off i'd like to say sorry that i didnt get to this sooner i didnt notice this.. your emotion was fucking amazing in this piece like always man. i loved how it was just swarming all around me while i was reading basically pulling me in the whole time i was reading... a couple of times while i was reading i got lost in direction of the piece but as soon as i hit the end of the piece i was like OH, NO SHIT. so very well done there... your imagery was fucking bonkers aswell i mean honestly this piece was just pure dope.. your wordchoice was very on point and i couldnt really pick out anything that i'd change or replace. very nicly done man.
If you could return some feed on my piece "Let me melt into you" it would be much appriciated
Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
But how you fall doesn't matter
Its how you land
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...lt-363531.html
IF you dont mind
Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
But how you fall doesn't matter
Its how you land
Nah only got that one man... have been slacking in PS but been on point in SS and IE though. they are my new PS... lol you should defffinlty join one of the leagues if you havent yet... preff IE cause SS is going into playoffs after this week.
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Last edited by Dyl; May 26th, 2009 at 05:13 PM
Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
But how you fall doesn't matter
Its how you land
Well sign up in the thread inside the office... im sure KB will have no problem with letting your in for next week.
feed my piece cupcake..
n word i remember UP-the arts... shit just died... was dope though while it was alive. =/
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...on-361481.html
Hit this mate?
LOL
Last edited by Dyl; May 26th, 2009 at 05:13 PM
Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
But how you fall doesn't matter
Its how you land