10 lines
normal rules
due either tonight or tomorrow, no rush
NatSelect
TJC
10 lines
normal rules
due either tonight or tomorrow, no rush
check.
check
he doesn't write, multiple selection his lines are pre-select
and his bars used, played and wack, when playin against NatSelect
this dude's a fool, acceptin' my request to battle him, head to head
and I know something about you, every morning the bed is wet
his brains malfunctioning, splitting up like john and kate
cause when I come, his whole body figure will collapse and break
five lost but who gives a fuck, now I know what's actually a real punch
it's when your mom gave birth to you, and didnt want you to be her son
you write pretty fast, but watch out you dont slip and bust a nut
cuase your bars premature, how you get men pregnant from the but
he doesn't write, multiple selection his lines are pre-select
and his bars used, played and wack, when playin against NatSelect
this dude's a fool, acceptin' my request to battle him, head to head
and I know something about you, every morning the bed is wet
his brains malfunctioning, splitting up like john and kate
cause when I come, his whole body figure will collapse and break
five lost but who gives a fuck, now I know what's actually a real punch
it's when your mom gave birth to you, and didnt want you to be her son
you write pretty fast, but watch out you dont slip and bust a nut
cuase your bars premature, how you get men pregnant from the but[/QUOTE]
You've been ripped in the past, and ya lost all ur battles twice as fast
faggots got such a shitty streak, i hope u washed ur legs n' wiped ur ass
This pussy doesn't get woman, You make me wanna hurl n' smack em
cuz the last time T busted a nut, a fuckin group of squirrels attacked em
when you come to peeps houses they shove em in a basement
ur the type of low life that even bums pick on for entertainment
it doesn't matter how fast i type this, Its ya car you'll be losin to me
So if it seems like i scratched ya paint, it might have somthin to do with a key
You haven't dropped 1 good line,but seriously who has really felt this fuck?
so after the battle last thing TJC... a bunch of people tryin to help em up
10.
almost forgot about this.
opps i had ur verse up there for some reason when i posted
You've been ripped in the past, and ya lost all ur battles twice as fast
faggots got such a shitty streak, i hope u washed ur legs n' wiped ur ass
This pussy doesn't get woman, You make me wanna hurl n' smack em
cuz the last time T busted a nut, a fuckin group of squirrels attacked em
when you come to peeps houses they shove em in a basement
ur the type of low life that even bums pick on for entertainment
it doesn't matter how fast i type this, Its ya car you'll be losin to me
So if it seems like i scratched ya paint, it might have somthin to do with a key
You haven't dropped 1 good line,but seriously who has really felt this fuck?
so after the battle last thing TJC... a bunch of people tryin to help em up
he doesn't write, multiple selection his lines are pre-select
and his bars used, played and wack, when playin against NatSelect
not a strong diss here, use some wit
this dude's a fool, acceptin' my request to battle him, head to head
and I know something about you, every morning the bed is wet
...
his brains malfunctioning, splitting up like john and kate
cause when I come, his whole body figure will collapse and break
no
five lost but who gives a fuck, now I know what's actually a real punch
it's when your mom gave birth to you, and didnt want you to be her son
strongest line so far, gets an ok
you write pretty fast, but watch out you dont slip and bust a nut
cuase your bars premature, how you get men pregnant from the but
meh
look up some LLL battles or just other FL battles so you can truly grasp the punchline concept or get some wordplay
vs
You've been ripped in the past, and ya lost all ur battles twice as fast
faggots got such a shitty streak, i hope u washed ur legs n' wiped ur ass
meh
This pussy doesn't get woman, You make me wanna hurl n' smack em
cuz the last time T busted a nut, a fuckin group of squirrels attacked em
...rofl
when you come to peeps houses they shove em in a basement
ur the type of low life that even bums pick on for entertainment
no
it doesn't matter how fast i type this, Its ya car you'll be losin to me
So if it seems like i scratched ya paint, it might have somthin to do with a key
...no
You haven't dropped 1 good line,but seriously who has really felt this fuck?
so after the battle last thing TJC... a bunch of people tryin to help em up
lol bar o the battle
v/Nat
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=7175758
he doesn't write, multiple selection his lines are pre-select
and his bars used, played and wack, when playin against NatSelect
-miss
this dude's a fool, acceptin' my request to battle him, head to head
and I know something about you, every morning the bed is wet
-lame
his brains malfunctioning, splitting up like john and kate
cause when I come, his whole body figure will collapse and break
-meh
five lost but who gives a fuck, now I know what's actually a real punch
it's when your mom gave birth to you, and didnt want you to be her son
-eh
you write pretty fast, but watch out you dont slip and bust a nut
cuase your bars premature, how you get men pregnant from the but
-weeak
Vs
opps i had ur verse up there for some reason when i posted
You've been ripped in the past, and ya lost all ur battles twice as fast
faggots got such a shitty streak, i hope u washed ur legs n' wiped ur ass
-eh
This pussy doesn't get woman, You make me wanna hurl n' smack em
cuz the last time T busted a nut, a fuckin group of squirrels attacked em
-haha
when you come to peeps houses they shove em in a basement
ur the type of low life that even bums pick on for entertainment
-miss
it doesn't matter how fast i type this, Its ya car you'll be losin to me
So if it seems like i scratched ya paint, it might have somthin to do with a key
-eh
You haven't dropped 1 good line,but seriously who has really felt this fuck?
so after the battle last thing TJC... a bunch of people tryin to help em up
-nice
Nat wins with the squirrel line and closer
he doesn't write, multiple selection his lines are pre-select
and his bars used, played and wack, when playin against NatSelect
wasn't feeling it
this dude's a fool, acceptin' my request to battle him, head to head
and I know something about you, every morning the bed is wet
weak
his brains malfunctioning, splitting up like john and kate
cause when I come, his whole body figure will collapse and break
na
five lost but who gives a fuck, now I know what's actually a real punch
it's when your mom gave birth to you, and didnt want you to be her son
didn't really rhyme
you write pretty fast, but watch out you dont slip and bust a nut
cuase your bars premature, how you get men pregnant from the but
whackness
vs
You've been ripped in the past, and ya lost all ur battles twice as fast
faggots got such a shitty streak, i hope u washed ur legs n' wiped ur ass
meh
This pussy doesn't get woman, You make me wanna hurl n' smack em
cuz the last time T busted a nut, a fuckin group of squirrels attacked em
ok
when you come to peeps houses they shove em in a basement
ur the type of low life that even bums pick on for entertainment
so-so
it doesn't matter how fast i type this, Its ya car you'll be losin to me
So if it seems like i scratched ya paint, it might have somthin to do with a key
meh
You haven't dropped 1 good line,but seriously who has really felt this fuck?
so after the battle last thing TJC... a bunch of people tryin to help em up
alright
V/Nat
vote super
more polished execution...better concepts
wittier wording....stayed consistant aswell
tjc, work on your concepts..they need to be more
creative and hit harder as disses...they are too simple
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upping, any tips appreciated
This pussy doesn't get woman, You make me wanna hurl n' smack em
cuz the last time T busted a nut, a fuckin group of squirrels attacked em
You haven't dropped 1 good line,but seriously who has really felt this fuck?
so after the battle last thing TJC... a bunch of people tryin to help em up
vs
Nothing
TJC You Tried But Overall Your Verse Lacked Alot..Rhyming, Punches, Execution, There Wasn't Much Of Anything To Go Off Of But Good Putting Effort Into It - Keep Elevating Though..Nat Came Consistent, First Few Bars Were Ok But Overall He Hit Hard..Creative, Humor, Good Execution And Set-Ups, Tight Verse Dude..The Ones I Quoted Above Were The Bars That Made Me Laugh And They Was Tight..
v/ Nat
RTF On My Battle