Taking advice from some amazing people i went to the drawing bored and devised something. I used a topic new and try to get deep like they said. Obviously I wont be that much better than last but one more time for more critisism that can help me practice over the next couple months.After this you wont hear from me in open mic for some time until i perfect it all but i will start Battle rapping..
Life is pain, motivate.{title}
Sipping promethizen & codine to moderates my Focus
Sitting back unlaxed while I cogitate my motives
Are the decisions I made the right one's I've chosen?
Cause when I beg for answers no words are spoken.
And No light to my situation: it's looking Gloomy still
No spelburg But this life is like a movie reel
No cuts or takes just actors, I dont know who is real!
Or what is real, leaving me in a state of sad depression
Shit you undergo even as an adolesence.
Pain inside you cant hide like a fat erection!
Losing sight of my game plan Like a bad connection.
And Without hope In this world you are a ray charles.
Blind in the hall of success, you'll hit the paved walls
You'll never reach the end, at the main doors.
You'll only listen close, for when the rain falls.
So open up your retina let your eyes see the light
You lost everything? take whats left make it rite
Put up a fight And give yourself another shot at life!.
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