Krytical (4-2) vs. Langston (4-3)

[Brandon Cee]

Rules and Regulations

Please note the due times in the rules. Be on time, and as always, good luck!

[Express'on]

check gl bro

[Str8 JackIt]

check man...looking forward to this....the topics are sick so lets do this!

[Str8 JackIt]

“Fast Lane”

College kid in the morning and athlete at afternoon
A hustler by fall of night riding the waves under the moon
Consuming his daily drugs of education one day soon
Would teach him the ins and outs of that song through a different tune

...::PLAY::...
“Jump in the fast-lane, switch it up without a blinker”
“School is cool to the fools, you don’t want to be a thinker”
“Let me show you the ropes, stick and move, with the dope”
“Pick and choose, how you cope, cause this is the road to hope”

http://img810.imageshack.us/img810/4659/fastlane.jpg

Starring at starry skies, on top of the dorm-roof
Building lights in the night illuminate powerful thoughts
Clouds surrounding the building give his brain-storm-proof
The truth is out on a chase demanding someone have it caught

*You ought-not-be-scared, the world will mold you into place*
*Either be down to earth or get launched into outer space*
*Fate can only be chosen if you understand its grace*
*And say hello when you meet her if you recognize her face*

And we’re back…
Straight in attack-mode, super grind-hard
Your mind’s-scarred, from that blue-flame mentality
Making each decision a regrettable reality
Edible by law and justice stomach’s all the casualties

*Try joining the cool, missing class, for some ass*
*Hit the blunt-puff-pass-now you pouring up a glass*
*Slizzard mouth, full of sass, jaw-hooked, like a bass*
*And this phase will never end until you put off in a cas-ket*

Here’s a little something that I want to ask-quick…
Was it worth it the end to only lose?
Put something on your face to hide the truth like in that Mask-flick
A better future for your life you couldn’t choose?

*Wanna jump in the fast-lane, have a blast-mane*
*Gotten caught in the hype and can’t take back none of your wrongs*
*Crying when you’re pulled over getting asked your last-name*
*Sirens and slamming doors, shutting bars the last-song*

Can’t recoup, missing that old-will you had to strive
Making your momma proud was half the reason you alive
Sentenced a couple years to meditate on your mistakes
Might want to fasten your seatbelt if you gone avoid the brakes



"THE END"

Yours Truly,
Langston Viewz

[Express'on]

http://i51.tinypic.com/kd76gm.png

Letting Go

The sun glowed in her eyes, she's the living pride of a Gemini
Every time I see her Im reminded why she's the reason for life
I like her more than similes, her skin ebony her touch is killing me,
Slowly, the lowly humbling smile, that makes each day worthwhile
Childhood crushed lust grew above the divinity of love; to her

I want to smother her very essence, her resemblance is so keen to me
My queen, my everything, I'll cling to you, walk you through shadows
I'll built castles around you to encapsulate your innocent laugh
Half of me wants to hold you, the other have tells me to mold you
Letting you go is a bold new world, and I know what I told you; but

Im going through changes, and I want you here with me now
I know your proud, but the clouds are almost gone, the ground
Is rising the horizons longs for its guiding star, to lead me far; away
From pain, that lingers after your fingers part ways from my hand
The sand holds your foot prints as my tears fall along each grain

>>>Its strange this feeling, Im ready to let go, so mom here I go

::
::
::
::

*releases balloon

[Vinzr]

Langston - This was a nice piece, you're improving with every week that goes by in the SS. I'm liking your style although I think there are a few areas you could touch up on. You switched up the rhyme scheme/pattern a few times throughout but I would have liked to have seen some multis or internals thrown in. As far as flow goes though I think you did nice. You also got your piece to say something rather than just dwelling in one place. Good stuff here.

Krytical - This wasn't too bad but I felt that you only just scratched the surface and didn't really go in deep like I was expecting you to. I've seen you drop better than this, but this is by no means bad at all. I think it could have been better if you expanded on it but for the most part things aren't too bad. You had a pretty decent rhyme scheme and steady flow. Overall, a pretty decent verse.

I think this was a close battle but I think Langston was able to produce a better piece this week. Both of you have potential.

v/ Langston

[trajik]

Langston: this wad pretty well done. The rhyme scheme was decent with more than a handful of multis and internals. Conceptually, not bad for the picture, I couldn't come up with better, but I found the execution, in your content just a little dry, you had some good imagery and everything seemed to be there but it wasn't really grabbing me. Nice work this week Langy.

Krytical: I really liked the line "i like her more than similies" what a sweet line. Your rhyme scheme was nice, I found it sort of unique, not the same old same old, a nice change. Content was nice and kept me compelled to read on, good imagery too.

Sorry to both of you for weak break downs, I'm tired, get off my back.

Vote: The verse that interested me more was written by

Krytical

[The Gwapfather]

Lang, your starting to come into your own now man.. you had a creative concept and carried it out quite well, just at times you were a bit too forward, I wanted to see more imagery and emotion involved, some parts really grabbed my attention while other parts I was wanting more from, but all in all is another step in the right direction and was an enjoyable read.. Krytical, the first time I read it I wasnt into a ton til I got to the end, but then reading it back after understanding the whole concept, the piece grew on me, wish it was a bit longer and had a lil more depth to it, but still was a very intersting read and was pretty well written, I liked how you changed up the rhyme scheme through out but still wished it was a lil stronger, this was a bit diff then your past copule weeks far as the structure so it was nice to see you change up, I think I've seen other structures work better for you though.. Overall though this was very close for me, but I have to give it to Krytical, for just having a piece that held a bit more imagery and emotion, Lang had a bit more of a creative concept, but where he was lacking, is where Krytical had his stronger points, nice job from both though..


VOTE: KRYTICAL

[Str8 JackIt]

*sigh*
2-1
his favor

[Malice]

Langston - you had an interesting framework, for me that was the most enjoyable part of the verse, you had some pretty decent content but it was pretty straight forward IMO

Krytical - the structure of this made me cringe a bit but I think that's more my OCD lol, this was a very subtle yet stylish twist on the mother-son relationship and the pain of letting it go and at some point finally reaching the point of letting go, but what I really liked was the motion you prompted from the picture, it was very creative and content appropriate, won you the match

v. KRY, more compelling topic interpretation

[Brandon Cee]

Krytical wins (5-2)
Langston loses (4-4)

CLOSED