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    Written Voices Jon's Avatar
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    undead leaf

    I am a zombie
    living dead
    everyday is gray hairs
    poking through a hard head
    bound downward
    on my shoulders
    and as I keep on rolling
    I grow boulder
    knowing it's almost over.
    hourglasses like these
    never turn a new leaf
    embed me in roots
    so one day I can grow up.
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    Re: undead leaf

    nothing?
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    Re: undead leaf

    I think it flowed really well until the very end. "Until I grow up" was choppy. Good job otherwise.

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