yung rambo
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Last edited by KnowP; December 16th, 2013 at 11:09 AM
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In there like swim wear
10 lines good for you? @yung rambo
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I've read a few clips of your useless newb spits
Lemme tell ya, losings something you better become attuned with
Your verse isn't worth a single pinch of raccoon shit
I won't just clean your clock, I'll beat you with the broomstick
Your lines are so weak I can snap em like a toothpick
Send your ass to LLL jr. and you'd still need to use a lube stick
I'm punching in your teeth, I'll make you hoop your forehead
I'm dropping this fucking fool like he was a dud nuclear warhead
That's the only way that you'll leave a good impression
I'm doing you a solid like I had a structural obsession
I'll take ya behind the shed and whoop ya ass and transform like bumblebee
My verse is like poison now what nigga you cant breathe
Gotcha shitting in ya pants like a nightmare on elm street
Super Lethal Injections Flow that make as go to sleep
Please you couldn't hurt a fly with the shit u spit
Newb? I'm more like Heavy Artillery, You a Scandal like Hillary
Better Punchlines You should put that shit on ya Christmas List
I got sum serious line that would put you out of you misery
I killed ya ass so bad boy Helen Keller could see this shit
You still a lil kid so go get ya ass a box of trix
Your verse isn't worth a single pinch of raccoon shit
I won't just clean your clock, I'll beat you with the broomstick
lmao
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indirect punches
Yung had some concepts that were ok but punches were pretty week. landed with no sting. gotta get more creative. definitely seen better from Fresh but that broomstick bar was dope af. keep writing more flips like that. cause the rest of the verse was blah n basic imo.
v. fresh
Wow fresh dominated this... Rambos was shit talking but not punchin.. Fresh had nice metaphors multis... Good punches... Rambo ur like me... I write mad rhymes but not battle verses.. Practice makes perfect.. Guess it takes some time to think deep..
Vote fresh.....
Fresh
Your verse isn't worth a single pinch of raccoon shit
I won't just clean your clock, I'll beat you with the broomstick
lol nice flip
I'm punching in your teeth, I'll make you hoop your forehead
I'm dropping this fucking fool like he was a dud nuclear warhead
not bad but could've been worded better
That's the only way that you'll leave a good impression
I'm doing you a solid like I had a structural obsession
thought this metaphorical comparison was ight
Yung
lots of played material and indirect hits man. gotta be more creative here.
v/Freah
Okay. this battle wasn't all that great. lacked wit on your delivery fresh. you had some alright concepts but you worded them not hardhitting and it took away from the sting in your punches. broomstick line was decent, everything else was more of a statement. come a little more witty and you'll be good.
Rambo- that shit was dry my man. it rapped like a bad street audio
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