Hands up
kungpow
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Hands up
Up in here, up in here
Supper..
Ariva
sUP yall
Eh. Didn't like either concept. Fresh. Your wording was kinda bland and I really wasn't feeling the rhyme scheme at all bro. 1. I hate the ABAB style. 2. You had little to no internals. 3. It wasn't creative or fresh. It was a short comic piece and I really didn't care a whole lot for it. Plus, I'd rape Rihanna. That bitch is super fine.
Pow, again. Wording was not that great. Though I appreciate you using the much smoother AABB format. I felt like you too lacked a creative rhyme scheme and multies. Concept matter was just as weak and overall wished it was much more than what it was.
Overall both came really weak, hope to see you both elevate. But I gotta go with KungPow for a better structured piece.
I got ups
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