Im New Read MY Stuff

[DoC]

Its the paragraph dolly lama,with a slash dot an a comma
I leave you in a coma, droppin bombs like Osama
Atomically atom bomb ya with this lyrical terrorOMA
Saw you MCs to pieces an leave ya bodys for Doma, --Jeffery Doma--
I leave you in so much fuckin Trauma
That youll need a docta to come an get my words the fuck up off ya
Face--I come propa, sucka bitch I will pop ya
Got balls so big you would think they was socca
Bring your best an ill top ya like the rest you be fallin
This shit is my callin, cause on this mic I be ballin
Fake MC dissolvin thats the problem im solvin
You cant step to this, you bitches aint even crawlin
Like a cyclone im rollin, full blown microphone maulin
Its appallin how I murder mass minuscule maggots
You cant hack it-and gay, ohh shit yall Bob Saget
Lil Faggot cant see me, my shit is too bionic
Straight superman killin spewin kryp~to~nite chronic
Shit, you hear the words to this kill~the~ mic sonnet
I bring plague on the mic---- every time that im on it

[DoC]

HERES ANOTHER



Fuck the government punk political fucks
Who think they the shit, they need a hit uh my nuts
Upside of there face for disgracin democracy
This nation of racists hate fakes an hypocrisy
Look how they got me compelled to live in hell
Rather see me in jail with no bail but ohh well
It will sell in America the united states of fakes
No hope for the broke only rich if your Bill Gates
Man im irate at this shithole of a place
No food in our site let alone on our plates
With people floatin around throwin millions in space
While people here are livin in boxes or crates
Hard to believe they need to see how poverty tastes
It’s a discrace but recognize, they just fill us with lies
While a kid leis in bed at night wishin he dies
And I despise money, the governments taxes
Just buys new shit for them battleaxes thats
Taxin my money without my consent
My moneys spent represent an put a dent in their system
An fight back this president an the people thats with him
Im against him his plan an all he stands for
The wars only started but ive departed some more
Im sore at the world I wont be tore apart
Cause from start to finish the pain I have is endless
I end this verse forever cursed and now im finished

[noncentz]

link an edit those as one they are real good reads you got a hot flaavor like tomales candy.

[N-Demik]

Read thee rules new one! :P

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95290

[DoC]

I did after i posted im workin on it now i already got 2 of 3 my bad

[noncentz]

n-demik your a meany face...... lol
hey D get at me we can get you on a collab see how you work

[DoC]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95384
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95289
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95365

Ok theres my 3 postes hope i made you happy lol j/k

[Spike Sanders]

YO DOC WUS^ NIGGA, THIS SHIT IS GOOD, VOCAB WAS THERE, YOU HAD SOME GOOD MULTIS, AND THE FLOW ON THE PIECES WAS GOOD.
I LIKED THE SECOND ONE BETTA MY SELF.
KEEP ELEVATIN, AND DOIN UR THING.

RETURN THE FAVOR AND CHECK OUT THIS LINK AND DROP SOME FEEDBACK ON THE PIECE THX.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95302

[N-Demik]

Ok theres my 3 postes hope i made you happy lol j/k

LOL....Just doing me job as a mod, nothing personal :P

[DoC]

UPPIN

[LM]

These were really good, I think if you did somethin really personal bout your life you'd be great.
The flow was there and the vocab was there. Good drop.
Overall 7/10

*Check your Pm's I'm gon' send you one and check 'love you,hate you when I post it.....it's gon' be great

[pot1ent]

Vocab majorly let this down.. The metaphors were good to see.. That was the thing thta made this good.. Your conepts were played(sry, but the truth).. Some metas were dodgy but others were on form.. Good job