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Thread: The System..!

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    The System..!

    theres too many perverts, criminals, everything is political
    government policies tryin to take away our principles
    i thought in America we were supposed to have freedom
    but all we get from these leaders is a misled trust and treason
    with weak minds we believe 'em, a lust for money their only reason
    they drain the money from our country but yet we vote to keep 'em
    ban smoking in public places, but still give rights to racists
    homes to illegal immigrants, but yet drop murder cases
    higher the taxes of us hard working people to pay the homeless
    they'll feed you a bunch of bullshit, but a politicians back is boneless
    they create this world we live in, we get no say in what should clear
    increase the price of fags and beer cos they know we'll persevere
    cos they know us all too well, they say something nice, we let it swell
    then that'll overcome the fact that they're criminals and then they'll find their wealth
    crimes risin, you know why, cos education is becomming weak
    with so many police on the street, you can resolve a situation with a speach.

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    good piece...pretty good length...i liked it....you should expand on it...overall great job ..9/10

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    thanks dawg... appriciate ya thought....waiting on more feedback.

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    nice piece flowed nicely
    good vocab keep droppin
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    thanks dawg for u time.....and your feedback

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    I was feeling this hommie. Everything did well, stright vocab, good flow, nice rhyme scheme. Maybe a little more work on attention lines. You know, that hypes the people up for the next couple of lines. Im feeling this, you have improved. 8 / 10
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    thats for you feedback dawg...

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    Your structure is ok but you need a fresher topic. . All that political shit gets old really fast. . Try thinking of something no one else has done before. .

    Also. .
    Funny how you say "fags and beer" when you're from chicago?

    I thought fags was an english term for cigarettes? Not have known it to be used in the Chicago area. . lol

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    relply to three other open mics, and post links to these replies in this thread, otherwise this gets deleted.
    thanks.
    wordperfect?
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    nice political piece.....................8/10

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    Decent lyrics, neatly creative.......................................... ................ 7.13873737/10

    You can have a merit

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    This is to Dope Wax:

    where i said: Fags and Bear

    Fags = English Term used for cigerrets..

    also used in Great Britian..you see i like to travel.. and listen to the way other people use their terms and slang..so i somethimes use it in my raps..


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    really good piece man maybe u should expand n try to give solutions to all that shit n dont listen to the peeps that say its an old topic cause as long as theres corruption n shit is twisted we gotta strive to fix it. im out
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    thank for your feedback dawg i appriciate it...

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    okay, ignore me and don't post your links.
    I've seen your replies, they're shitty as all anyways.
    Read the rules before you post again.
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